Increasing number of students are going to universirt instead of working after high school. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for younh people who do this.

The younger generation nowadays
prefer
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to pursue their higher learning at
univerisity
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university
rather than finding a job when they completed their diploma degree.
This
essay will examine the benefits and drawbacks of learning at the
university
. The two main benefits of pursuing higher education
are expand
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more academic skills and
knowledges
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knowledge
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.
Firstly
,
student
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students
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learn a basic skill from their background of
study
which they do not have critical knowledge to perform their ability. Attending
university
allow
student
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the student
a student
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to choose their favourite subject
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on their quality.
For example
,
students
who are good at
English
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language can select a teaching subject for their
study
.
Secondly
,
student
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students
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have a wide range of knowledge
in addition
to their
study
history. They can focus on
the
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real
study
and practice
skill
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to enhance their education.
However
, pursuing higher learning
also
have
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some more drawbacks like the lack of financial support as well as more stressful
works
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.
First
, the lack of money is the most common one for high
school
students
.
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Undergraduate
and
grauate
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graduate
school
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schools
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are having higher course
fee
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fees
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rather than
high
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school
which effect
to
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some
students
from the rural area.
For example
, the
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country side
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is
the
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place where having
alot
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a lot
of lower education people due to their parents can not support their
child
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children
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for
futher
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further
study
, so children decided to skip
their
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school
and find a work to support their family.
Secondly
, being a
university
student
seem to have more tasks from the professor. They need to complete more exercises, assignments and
also
the presentation within a strict
of
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deadline which
are
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they can not
affort
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afford
it
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well. To sum up, there are many good points and
also
many bad points of studying at the
university
which
are
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student
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students
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need to
be consider
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for their life. As the result,
students
may get a
skillful
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and better job while others are
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force
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to skip their
study
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studies
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with
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different
kind
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kinds
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of reasons.
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