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These days, more and more people move away from the area where they were born and brought up when they become adults. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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The line graph shows the average
number
 of
hours
 a person spent on various kinds of media from 1990 to 2005. The media includes television, the
Internet
,
radio
, and printed material. The years are shown in five-year intervals. An average person spent 25
hours
 a week watching TV in 1990. The
hours
 for TV gradually decreased until 1998, and
then
 dropped significantly to just over 17
hours
 per week by 2005. The
number
 of
hours
 spent on printed material in 1990 was at 7
hours
 which continuously fluctuated but
then
 decreased to 2.5
hours
 by 2005.
Radio
 started at just under 4
hours
 in 1990 and slowly increased to just under 5
hours
 by 2005. The
hours
 spent on the
Internet
 show a different trend. The
hours
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 to appear in 1993. They
then
 steadily went up from 0
hours
 to 2.5
hours
 by 2001. From 2001 to 2005, the
hours
 show a tremendous increase to about 14
hours
. As an overall trend, the
number
 of
hours
 spent on television and printed material decreased over the years, while the
number
 of
hours
 spent on the
radio
 and the
Internet
 increased,
although
radio
 did not show tremendous change. The
Internet
 showed the greatest increase and television showed the greatest decrease. It can be assumed that the significant change
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Internet
 had an effect on watching TV.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • migration
  • globalization
  • socio-economic factors
  • traditional norms
  • cosmopolitan environment
  • brain drain
  • assimilation
  • gentrification
  • alienation
  • multiculturalism
  • infrastructure strain
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