You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter - describe a news story in your country - explain why people are interested in it - say how the story personally relates to you

Dear Joey, I hope
this
letter finds you fit and fine. I read your message on Facebook to seek my help with your presentation on my country and I am so glad that you are preparing a presentation on a major
event
in my nation. As you asked me to tell you about an important
event
these days in my country, I want to enlighten you about the world’s biggest yoga camp
that is
being organized by the government on the 20th of
this
month. The news of
this
grand
event
is being broadcast by various international news channels
such
as BBC and Skynews.
Moreover
, the number of interested people is increasing day by day because they want to know more about yoga and its impact on health and fitness and
also
want to attend
this
biggest
event
in my country.
Further
, being a yoga trainer, I am so excited to be a part of
this
event
. In fact, I recently got a letter from the local administration to contribute to
this
event
as a teacher which is really a great opportunity for me.
In addition
, I ensure you;
I’ll
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send you all the updates, information and images on Facebook that will help you a lot not only to submit a wonderful presentation but
also
you may learn many things from
this
event
. Pay my regards to your parents. With love, Harry
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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