Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Historically people tend to physically move during the workday, but nowadays there are a lot of jobs that do not require physical activities. And
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to be worse and worse if we think about remote work and corona. So I agree that there
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less exercise experience people
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nowadays in comparison to previous years. Of course, there are still a lot of professions that still
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to be active,
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in the field or
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instructor or flight attendant. But the popularity of computer freelance jobs and global automation in manufacturers are not contestable.It is important to keep your body fit and healthy, and it’s
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responsibility of each and every one. It is pity to know that many of us are getting so tired during the day, so we
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not in the right mood to visit
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after work. But fortunately, there are many more ways to keep fit without intense
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. The
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is learning about work-life balance, which is
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popular topic. You can select dancing or
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as something that makes you happy and fulfilled The
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if you are eating healthy you might probably
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energy level high. The
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your car and walk everywhere –
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my mind. In conclusion, there are some ways and information to learn
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sport in an easy way and make it the part of daily routine
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  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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