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THERE IS A PROBLEM TODAY THAT COPYRIGHT SUCH AS MUSIC, FILMS, AND BOOKS ARE FREELY AVAILABLE ON THE INTERNET WITH THE RESULT THAT OWNERS OF THE WORKS LOSE MONEY.

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Copyright is an issue which all
artist
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 have to fight with. Nowadays, you can find everything you want on the internet and download it free.
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 fact provokes that many
people
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 lost
money
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. I remember that when I was young, I downloaded films, songs or TV series from
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the webs
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webs
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web
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,
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 because I
have
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 not much
money
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 to
buy
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.
In
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 that time I do not
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 about the effects on artist and their industry. My way of enjoying these things now
have
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has
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 changed. These
people
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,
such
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 as singers, actors or writers, spend a lot of time creating fantastic works for us, so I think we
must
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paid
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 them. Every worker
receive
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 their
salary related
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with
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to
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 the value and
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success
 of their job. In other
professions
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 you do not dude about
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 them so in these cases it
shoul
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should
 be the same way. I am not happy with
this
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 situation because I like listening to music, going
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to performance
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performance
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performances
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, going to the cinema and reading books. I like supporting these
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 and spending my
money
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, if I have it,
in
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on
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 their
works
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work
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.
This
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 is the main reason why I am grateful
with
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for
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 new
plataforms
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platforms
apeared
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appeared
,
such
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 as Netflix, HBO, Spotify
or
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and
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 Kindle. These apps help
artist
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an artist
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 to get their
money
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 and to
growth
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 in each industry. In conclusion, I do not like how
people
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 try to have these things free within
think
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 who is working behind to give us new experiences,
new
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a new
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 world where we can lost in or
new
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a new
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 BSO for our
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lives
life
lifes
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lives
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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