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Some people think that history provides a valuable information for us. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #history #information
In
this
 day and age, whether
history
 is a source of
information
 has become a topic in the general public. To my way of thinking, I am inclined to concur with
this
 statement, but just
in
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 some sides. On the one hand, there
are
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 numerous culprit why I agree with
this
 view.
First
 of all, our ancestors suffered from many fatal mistakes and failures in the past. Having
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 deep understanding
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 these invaluable lessons can
helps
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 us avoid
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repeating the same mistakes.
Furthermore
, we can learn many
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 related to lives that our
forefather
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 made,
then
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, we can gain
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insight into our lives. On the flip side, many individuals oppose the statement that
history
 is
a valuable
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valuable information
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information
 in our lives. The principal reason is they think
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information
 is interpreted in different
documentary
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 and perspectives.
Therefore
, the
information
 may be unreliable and leads to
the
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 genuine misunderstanding in people’s knowledge.
Besides
,
history
information
 is no longer valuable because the majority of
population
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 mostly
pay
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 attention to mathematics,
chemistry
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and chemistry
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 fields that have numerous occupation opportunities.
As a result
, they can enhance their career prospect. Having all the aforementioned arguments, I would conclude that
history
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information
 is useful but just
in
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 some sides.
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