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Many governments think that economics progress is there most important goal some people fieber think that other type of progress are equally important for a country discuss both views and give your opinion

#governments #economics #progress #people #fieber #type #country
Many
governements
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governments
 in the world,
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thing
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think
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 that
economy
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it
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is the
first
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thing
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think
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 to improve
live
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 quality of
people
, but in my
opinion
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 they do wrong.
I
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 fact improving education must be the
first
 goal for
moderns
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modern
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 gouvernements, if every
country
improve
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 the education of their citizens, they
facilitae
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facilitate
 the possibilities to have a good employment position. Once the
people
 have their
desire
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 position they will engage and
finally
 get married, they will buy a house and
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 all together for each new
adquisition
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acquisition
people
 will pay tax to the
country
. The incoming tax
are
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 going to improve possibilities for the
gouvernment
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government
 to invest in
infractructures
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infrastructures
infrastructure
, new roads, new harbours, new hospitals, schools, etc.
This
 is the real way to improve the national economy in each
country
. Give a
welth
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wealth
 living way to
people
 and they will
undertand
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understand
 that government improve their
live
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life
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 making
then
 the
first
importan
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important
 thing in the
country
.
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