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Some people think that we should divide students based on their academic ability, while others think we should educate all students together. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #students #ability
Many implementations exist in the field of education. Ranging from the classification of
students
 to interest domains to be educated them without
seperation
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separation
, there are various approaches.
However
, the question about which one is more useful is to keep the
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uncertainty
. Because either
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 can have
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beneficial effects for
students
. From my point of view, up to a degree, all
students
 should learn the
fundemantal
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fundamental
fundamentals
 sciences.
In addition
 to that, after a while, the grouping process among
students
 can bring
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positive results. To start with the opinion of dividing
students
 to scientific capability, a fragile point is to emerge as well. In case
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being classified the
students
 in very early times before maturing their brain and emotion structure,
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will take the young individuals to a situation
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 unclear.
In other words
, these persons, most likely, will change
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 decisions. Given the those who are forced to head toward to any departments according to the
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successful
 marks, in a close time period, these
students
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 that the different subjects will take attention. On the other side,
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complementary education can offer the opportunity of knowing more
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students
 own. Another good output of being
students
 together is to share the creative views
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 a particular issue.
For example
, when the
students
 are exposed to a problem, lots of solutions can be expressed thanks to people who have
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different views. From
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, the mixing of ideas will gain a great deal
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 alternatives in reaching the solving point. To sum up, evaluating
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the academic results, the mindset of
students
 will be paralyzed. At least,
instead
 of dividing into the marks only, a reasonable time should be determined in order to combine the
students
' ideas by holding them together.
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