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When designing a building the most important factor is intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#factor #appearance
Building a full of amenities
house
 is the dream of everyone. While some people argue that
most
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 significant factor of building a
house
 is its outside
appearance
 and
other
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others
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 focus on the proper utilisation of the whole area of
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. I totally agree with
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 opinion and in the forthcoming paragraphs elucidate the reasons and
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 with supporting my viewpoint. To embark
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, there are myriads of
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reason
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of
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 focusing on the
appearance
 of
house
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 from the outside while building it, one of them is,
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 would help the stranger and relatives to recognise the place of
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house
 or the colony where dwells are built on the same architectural pattern from outside.
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 most of the
house
 architecture of colonies
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same
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appearance
.
As a result
, it will
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colony
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 sense of unity among the stranger and knowns by having
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 architectural design of
house
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.
Moreover
, spending extra money on the outside
appearance
 of the building for making it elegant, will show a worthy reputation toward the society. Generally, most
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people judge somebody financially by their
house
; so, focusing on making elegant
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 from
outside
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 would surge their value ability in the society.
Thus
, paying attention
on
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outward
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appearance
 of
building
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have
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 several benefits. To conclude,
although
person
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 should
also
 focus on the interior of the
house
 because he will have to spend most part of the time inside the
house
, in my opinion outward look of
house
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 has its own identity in society
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