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It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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There is an ongoing debate as to whether the advancement of
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 can possibly replace the traditional culture because of incompatibility. In my opinion, while modern development can serve many aspects of human beings, I believe the new
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 can help to sustain the
cultures
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 if
people
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 apply it effectively.
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 and foremost, there are myriad benefits of technological usage since it has been proved as an important tool to make
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's lives getting better.
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, AI
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 has replaced the traditional way of taking care of houses with intelligent robots and smart home systems which made some man-made equipment has become less popular in households. The new norms come with the transformation of
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's attitudes towards
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 which can be seen in all sectors.
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, the connection between traditional
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 and the new generations has been hindered by the number of convenient lifestyles introduced to
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 world.
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, some younger
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 do not realize the importance of cultural preservation as it is the root of our civilization.
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, a variety of advantages in
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 can be a part of the new methodology to maintain traditional values if
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 in societies are aware of the existing
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 and try to make use of
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 with appropriate approaches.
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, Elderly
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 need to take a lead role to encourage new generations to understand those values, while younger
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 can support those traditional ways of life by using their knowledge innovatively to apply in preservation. Take the cooking as an example, they can use social media to distribute the recipes of traditional foods or order some ingredients to be directly delivered to their houses. Obviously, another benefit of
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 is to store and spread forgotten traditions
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 as local language and local history which are advantageous for
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 to understand more about how they live their lives. In conclusion, I disagree with the view that advanced
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 will disrupt traditional culture unless
people
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 do not recognize its significance. If
people
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 use the benefits of
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 to preserve those traditions and
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, the loss of
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 a precious heritage would be minimized.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inevitable
  • traditional cultures
  • technological development
  • modern society
  • incompatible
  • decline
  • traditional crafts
  • rituals
  • digital communication
  • preserve
  • promote
  • documentation
  • online archives
  • virtual museums
  • social media
  • coexist
  • integrates
  • digital storytelling
  • augmented reality
  • cultural tourism
  • perspective
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