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"In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?"

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In spite of the advances in agriculture, there are many people starving to death around the
world
. I believe the reasons for the hunger around the
world
are not only depend
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do not only depend
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 on the lack of food. These reasons include unfair distribution of
resources
 or too much
consuming
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consumption
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 of natural
resources
 by small parts of
population
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the population
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 around the
world
. I think the ignorance and lack of quality education for everyone in some
countries
also
affects
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affect
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 the hunger in these parts of the
world
.
First
 of all, it is essential to reduce the extreme
consuming
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consumption
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 of
the
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apply
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natural
resources
 in some
countries
 since the governments of these
countries
 look for more
resources
 in other
countries
 which are in difficult conditions and ready to sell their
resources
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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