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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Although
, nowadays some
people
 believe that the better way of controlling
crime
 is to give a criminal a longer time in prison. Other some believe that there are alternative methods of reducing
crime
 in a
society
. In my ,opinion it giving
imprisonment
 depends upon to what extent the
crime
 is committed. On the one hand, some consider that the long
imprisonment
 the lesser in
crime
 rate, in the other words considering long
imprisonment
 will have a mental effect on committing an offence. For ,example , in
Dubai
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 those committing a
crime
 like rape have lifetime
imprisonment
 and for a
,
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theft they literally cut smash off their hand. So
this
 law of committing a
crime
 has reduced the
crime
 rate almost to zero,
thus
 a longer stay in prison will stop an individual to stop before being involved in a
crime
.
On the other hand
, some
people
 consider other options to be much more helpful in reducing
crime
 in a
society
,
such
 as a person who has carried out a
crime
 has been forced to be involved in free community work.
This
 will enable them in improve their mentality and
also
 be beneficial to
society
.
Moreover
 doing free work for a
society
 like cleaning parks and public washrooms and so on
,
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will help them rehabilitate offenders and help the
people
 at the same time.
Thus
this
 will
also
 clear that there is
also
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alternative way of long
imprisonment
. In my opinion, how an individual should be punished depends on the nature and motive of the
crime
 they have performed, but there should be
a
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prolonged
crimes
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such
 as murder and rape as the criminal should be announced a death strictly.
People
 involved in lesser degree offences can be punished by the other means of punishment. To conclude, stating my opinion about reducing
crime
 by a prolonged stay in a prison will not change a person's alternative method, of free community work will definitely change a person and teach him how to live in a
society
.
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