Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Although
, nowadays some
people
believe that the better way of controlling
crime
is to give a criminal a longer time in prison. Other some believe that there are alternative methods of reducing
crime
in a
society
. In my ,opinion it giving
imprisonment
depends upon to what extent the
crime
is committed. On the one hand, some consider that the long
imprisonment
the lesser in
crime
rate, in the other words considering long
imprisonment
will have a mental effect on committing an offence. For ,example , in
Dubai
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those committing a
crime
like rape have lifetime
imprisonment
and for a
,
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theft they literally cut smash off their hand. So
this
law of committing a
crime
has reduced the
crime
rate almost to zero,
thus
a longer stay in prison will stop an individual to stop before being involved in a
crime
.
On the other hand
, some
people
consider other options to be much more helpful in reducing
crime
in a
society
,
such
as a person who has carried out a
crime
has been forced to be involved in free community work.
This
will enable them in improve their mentality and
also
be beneficial to
society
.
Moreover
doing free work for a
society
like cleaning parks and public washrooms and so on
,
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will help them rehabilitate offenders and help the
people
at the same time.
Thus
this
will
also
clear that there is
also
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alternative way of long
imprisonment
. In my opinion, how an individual should be punished depends on the nature and motive of the
crime
they have performed, but there should be
a
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prolonged
crimes
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such
as murder and rape as the criminal should be announced a death strictly.
People
involved in lesser degree offences can be punished by the other means of punishment. To conclude, stating my opinion about reducing
crime
by a prolonged stay in a prison will not change a person's alternative method, of free community work will definitely change a person and teach him how to live in a
society
.
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