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In the past, lectures were used as a way of teaching a large number of students, but now with the development of technology for education, many people think there is no justification for attending lectures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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In
this
 tech-savvy modern world, everything is available online including sessions for academic courses. Some people claim that teaching a large number of
students
 in a classroom should be replaced by online technology;
However
, I disagree with their point of view as the classroom
trainings
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 leads to
better
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a better
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 future and education as they are interactive, and
also
 provides the human touch.
To begin
 with,
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availability
availbility
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the availbility
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 of lectures in a classroom
enable
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enables
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 an opportunity for
students
 to clear
there
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 bottlenecks right away.
For instance
,
students
 can interrupt the lecturer in between the session to clear their doubts which will ensure they have
clear
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 understanding of basic concepts before learning the advanced topics.
In addition
 to that,
students
 can reach out to their teachers to ask any questions due to which they can do a deeper investigation that results in better grades.
Thus
, learning in groups under
supervision
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 of a faculty yields better ranks.
Besides
 interactive learning,
school
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 environment give an opportunity to make
a
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apply
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new friends,
group
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 conversations, teach many aspects of life which is crucial for human beings, and
also
 develop additional soft skills.
For example
, It is scientifically proven that some
students
 who frequently attend
the
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group meetings have
a better speaking skills
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better speaking skills
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, less stage fear, and increased leadership skills.
In addition
 to the above-mentioned benefits,
such
environment
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 allows children to learn about behaviour, feelings, friendship, and
capability
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the capability
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 to judge positive & negative which play a vital role to live
better
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a better
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life
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lives
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 in
this
 modern society.
Therefore
,
interactive
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an interactive
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 education system not only
produce
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produces
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 rank holders but
also
 a well-behaved human being for
this
 society.
Finally
, to recapitulate,
though
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technology based
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technology-based
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 learning
have
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has
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 some advantages;
However
, I believe
such
 online courses cannot replace the classrooms, as in-person coaching
are
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is
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 interactive and give
human
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a human
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 touch to the children.
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