Some people think that the tennage years are the happiest times of most people's live. Others thin that adult life bring more happiness. In spite of greater responsibiilities Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

Nowsday
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Nowadays
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, most people are
evaluate
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happiest
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the happiest
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times should be
tennage
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teenage
years or
adult
life
.
Perspective
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are varies from
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perspectives.
Thus
, we should discuss in the below paragraph for Some people think that
tennage
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teenage
would be the happiest time as they were focused on their
study
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studies
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without worrying
financial
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about financial
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burden.
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, when we
want
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learn piano, the school fee will be paid by
parents
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our parents
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. Part of people might think
adult
life
bring
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brings
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more happiness
,
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because they can enjoy financing freedom without asking parent subsidy.
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, while
i
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can
earning
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income, which can give me more opportunities to travel around the world without asking any
subsdies
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subsidies
from
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my parent
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parent
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parents
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. Of course,
adult
life
need
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to take more
responsibilites
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responsibilities
responsibility
than teenage, no matter of
self development
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self-development
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,
work
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and work
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. You are responsibilities what you do, there will not have
anymore
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any more
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guideline
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guidelines
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from school or parents.
Therefore
, you are completely free to make your own choices. In conclusion, I would say
adult
life
would be the happiest
times
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time
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as
i
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I
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can have more freedom no matter on finance.
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