Increasing travels between countries enable people to learn different cultures or to increase tension between people from different countries?

This
is a notion that the growth
tourists
may make ability learn each other
cultures
or create problems among different countries
people
. In my belief, the two reasons for persuading learning different
cultures
by growth
tourists
are validated that they consist of attracting
tourists
for
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getting more money
by
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indigenous
people
and their governments and increasing awareness of each other through social media. The local
people
and their governments
endeavor
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to attract
tourists
to visit their own country, the need of local
people
to having jobs and incoming by
tourists
is
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reason, with some measures like presentations and introduction own culture on web or publishing brochures so
tourists
maybe become curious and are persuaded to visit there.
For example
, recently our government, Iran, and non-government organizations (
NGO
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) with
this
action has caused increasing
tourists
and knowing more foreign
people
about our precious culture. Two recent decades, the using social media like Facebook has increased dramatically so every person has some friends with different
cultures
. These relationships, despite the growth of tourism, have caused respect and learning for other
cultures
significantly. The intimacy among them has been spreading because they have learned about
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rules, limitations and taboos
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cultures
.
On the other hand
,
this
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argue
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that may be making
enemy
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among countries
people
because
traveling
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is fallacious because some abuse and
violence
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behaviors
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by some
tourists
or protective beliefs in native
people
is
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not common and
it
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can be ignored.
As a result
, Based on mentioned reasons about travelling to countries, absolutely the enable
people
to learn other culture reasons outweigh the making tension reason.
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