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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some
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 believe that having high-speed trains for connecting different cities is crucial, so a big amount of payment must be required to build more
railway
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 roads in many states. While others think that public transport should be developed by funding. In
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 essay, I will discuss both views. On the one hand,
railway
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 engineering had some inventions that
people
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 can access different locations in a short time by road.
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, an old train may take 5-6 hours for transporting from a city to another city, while a high-speed
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 takes only 2 hours. Due to some job requirements, a lot of
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 have to travel among the cities or countries,
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 as journalists and singers.
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, fast trains help busy
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 to move from one way to another in an efficient way.
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, high-speed trains help to improve the air quality because they use electric energy to drive the rolling stocks and electric locomotives consume less power.
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, most of the citizens use local transportations every day and the number is increasing in the population.
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, some of the old transportations are still functioning and only need a small amount of money to repair. For that matter, we can choose to take the repairment than buy a new one.
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, in a short time, the transportations may be damaged again. If
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 just spend money to repair them, it can cost a whole new bus. In conclusion,
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 many
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 think that it is crucial to
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 new
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 lines, others think that the government should improve public transport. In my opinion, the government can invest in extending
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 lines to major cities to boost the economy.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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