With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered and some are even facing extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What can be done to deal with this problem?

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and pamphlets to get to know more about
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and learn how to protect them even by taking some small measures
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deforestation
  • urban development
  • illegal hunting
  • endangered species
  • extinction
  • ecological balance
  • ecosystems
  • pollination
  • seed dispersal
  • population control
  • biodiversity
  • resilience
  • intrinsic value
  • economic benefits
  • tourism
  • agriculture
  • legislation
  • wildlife protection laws
  • illegal hunting
  • wildlife reserves
  • marine protected areas
  • public awareness
  • conservation
  • community involvement
  • sustainable practices
  • scientific research
  • conservation strategies
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