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What are the adveatage and disadvantage the leaving your country to live or study abroad

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Nowadays, many
people
 are leaving their
country
 to get
further
 education or they switch their job in order to get a good raise. Leaving the
country
 has its own advantages and disadvantages.
This
 essay will cover both the views and a conclusion
thereafter
. On one hand, with the advancements in technology
people
 are leaning more and more towards it. Everyone wants to be as qualified as possible, as rich as possible, in order to become one
people
 leave their
country
 either for
further
 studies or for good money they are offered from abroad.
Furthermore
, to get a peaceful environment, and be accompanied by brilliant students, many children study abroad.
For example
, Einstein had left Germany and started his new life in the USA.
In addition
, another reason why
people
 tend to leave their
country
 is because of the salary difference, in their home
country
 they are getting a sum of $10,000 a year, whereas in different countries
this
 could be equivalent to $60,000.
As a result
, they can now save a sum for their dear ones. On other hand, there are
also
 some disadvantages when
people
 leave their
country
.
Firstly
, it gets hard to live without your family in a different place.
Secondly
,
people
 tend to miss many functions of their close ones.
Last
 but not the least, one-sided aeroplane fare is so high that you can only plan to visit home once a year.
Thus
, many
people
 suffer from homesickness as they miss their family and home a lot. In conclusion, there are many more disadvantages and advantages of leaving a
country
. I believe when there are no major differences between staying put and moving to a new land it is better to leave.
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