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In the past people ate local in season food but now people tend to consume out of season food from different parts of the world do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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With the rapid development of
globalization
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 the ratio of commodities imported from various points of the
world
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 is increasing .
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, nowadays people prone to it more out-of-season food rather than seasonally and locally ones .Like several new trends which the new
world
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 brings to us
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 phenomenon holds
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 both pros and cons. As far as I am concerned that it has much more negative impacts rather than positive ones .
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 as globalization allows countries to import products from all over the
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 ,people are able to try exotic fruits and vegetables that cannot be produced in some countries .
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 can give a chance individuals to enjoy and be aware of
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world's
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, out-of-season food is rife with chemicals since a wide range of preservatives is added to fasten their ripening. Meanwhile ,foods might lose their nutritional value if they are preserved or frozen in order to deliver around the
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 .
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 change originates ample difficulties around the country .
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 and foremost ,agriculture is affected since the consumption of the indigenous food declining local farmers confront with the bankruptcy .
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 ,
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 situation leads to unemployment which can be a critical danger for society .
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 it would be a huge loss if we relied solely on local ingredients . In conclusion, no matter how many benefits exported out of season products have, I strongly believe that cons overbalance their pros.

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