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Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Advertising is to let you know about the
things
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 that are available in the market. The
things
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 that are usually trending are seen in
advertisements
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. A TV channel profits by advertising its sponsors. It is their need to run an Ad on TV as if they don't do so they will lose their sponsors. Whether you should buy a thing only by looking at it in the
advertisements
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 is not a wise answer. They don't emphasize you to buy anything. They just tell you the good points of everything. The decision of buying those
things
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 depends on you and your needs. Whenever you go to the market you see a variety of
things
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 but you do not buy everything, you buy only
things
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 that are needed. So blaming the
advertisements
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 for your extra expenses solely may be wrong. I personally never pay attention to those
advertisements
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 that show
things
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 which are of no use to me like electronics because my home is well equipped with those. I
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 do not buy
things
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 like cereals, chocolates, icecreams and juices by just seeing them on advertising boards because I am not fond of that, but I like to try the variety in
things
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 like shampoo, soaps and beauty products so I take interest in their
advertisements
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. The help me to decide beforehand at home what I need to survey in the market. These advertisement boards sometimes help us to know about new offers regarding many
things
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,
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 as summer camps, the need for loans for the needy, zakat donation information to any NGO or donation offers. So everything is there in the world around us we need to select what to choose.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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