What can adults learn from kids? provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

In
modern
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world, I assume that
adult
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adults
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are taught a lot from children. The reason why I reckon
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I am an Art Teacher.
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, I
am not only teach
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them
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but
also
learn
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from them.
First
of all, the kids teach me how to
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. As you know, there are a bunch of stories from children that yearn for telling. If you lack
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focusing on them, you can not seek
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interesting points
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their stories.
Second
, a huge of creations from kids
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make me extreme surprise. Honestly, I am inspired a lot
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their imagination. To sum up, children
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not only learn from adults
,
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but
also
teach us too much of incredible things.
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