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nowdays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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The
work
 is considered that the main part of the
people
's living and all
people
 had almost time of their life in it. some
people
 prefer
owner
work
 more than
work
 for a company or factory etc. in
this
 essay I will discuss why many folks prefer the
owner
 carer and what the main disadvantages of
this
 issue are. There are many situations where the vast of society likes to
work
 lonely and make
owner
 businesses because they need the better opportunities for
work
.
for example
, many
people
 who have worked at companies and factories, left their positions because they need to did big steps.So in many ,
,
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cases employers have to make crucial decisions to build
owner
work
.
On the other hand
, there are many cons to being self-employed because there is not any kind of control and assessment for employers' efforts. In any kind of ,career it should be quality control on the operation system. The vast majority of
owner
 carers failed because there was bad control
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 it. so there are many risks to self-employed and it is not easy to do it .
Finally
, I think there are many pros to being self-employed but there is a huge challenge to success. the
people
 who like to make owners works need to be careful about all things about
work
 because there is not anybody to give their help and assessments and they should behave any information about what they have to do to make successful circumstances .
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