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nowdays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation why might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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 is considered that the main part of the
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's living and all
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 had almost time of their life in it. some
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 prefer
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 more than
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 for a company or factory etc. in
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 carer and what the main disadvantages of
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 issue are. There are many situations where the vast of society likes to
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 lonely and make
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 businesses because they need the better opportunities for
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, many
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 who have worked at companies and factories, left their positions because they need to did big steps.So in many ,
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cases employers have to make crucial decisions to build
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, there are many cons to being self-employed because there is not any kind of control and assessment for employers' efforts. In any kind of ,career it should be quality control on the operation system. The vast majority of
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 carers failed because there was bad control
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 it. so there are many risks to self-employed and it is not easy to do it .
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, I think there are many pros to being self-employed but there is a huge challenge to success. the
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 who like to make owners works need to be careful about all things about
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 because there is not anybody to give their help and assessments and they should behave any information about what they have to do to make successful circumstances .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • entrepreneur
  • freelancer
  • work-life balance
  • flexibility
  • income potential
  • financial risk
  • job security
  • benefits
  • employee benefits
  • investment
  • overworking
  • self-employed
  • traditional employment
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