Museums and art galleries should focus on works that show the history and culture of their own country rather than cultural of other parts of the works. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the majority of people think that galleries and

museums

should exhibit the local culture and

history

rather than showing

arts

from other parts of the

world

. I totally disagree with

this

statement, and in

this

essay

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I will support my opinion with arguments.

First

of all, the

museums

are

unique

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a unique

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place

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places

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where people can see all the elements of

arts

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art

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from different parts of our

world

To begin

with,

museums

which provide

arts

of other cultures, not only

country’s

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the country’s

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local habits, are more popular

among

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society.

As a result

of different cultural expositions, people are more interested to discover the ancient

arts

Moreover

, cultural exhibits attract a great number of tourists, and it results in

fact

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that the local government

earn

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more money from taxes from the travel and tourism industry.

Secondly

, the art institutions should not only show the overseas

history

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but

also

present native cultural

history

for visitors. Galleries should demonstrate the

heritage’s

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heritage

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language and traditions

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so that the society knew

lifestyle

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the lifestyle

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of the past generations. As an example, the British Museum exhibition in London is not only about historical events

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worldwide

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world wide

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, but

also

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has British

history

in one of its halls. As a consequence,

place

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the place

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attracts

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the

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apply

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international tourists and as

the

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apply

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citizens. To sum up, I strongly believe that

museums

and art galleries should not be divided by the national or international

type

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types

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. Art attractions should represent both local and overseas cultures to the public.

Additionally

, having

arts

from different parts of the

world

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useful

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a useful

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subject for

public

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the public

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and pupils.

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