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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazins for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter -explain why you would like the job -Give details why you would be a suitable person to employ -say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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 letter in response to your latest advertisement in Australia's magazines about the vacancy of taking care of your child and I want to apply for the same. As I am Indian and have completed my study in Daycare and now I am looking for a
job
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 to deploy my theoretical knowledge to practice. As far I had numerous years of experience in the past in my own country and I moved to Australia for enhancing my skills
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 why I chose the one-year study program at the Monash University and now I needed a
job
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 to excel in my skills,
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, I needed a
job
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 to earn for my livelihood as
still
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 I am dependant on my parent's income.
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, I will be a suitable candidate for
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job
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. As it is my profession, I will deploy my time
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 taking care of your child for the period of six months or more, if required. I have enough experience in the handling of children and I hope you would be satisfied with me at the end of my six month
job
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 period. Hope for a positive reply from your side. Yours faithfully, Rajat
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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