Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsary part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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contemporary world, the advent of BV technology is enhancing day
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life
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Moreover
, communities argue that students should want to be
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and voluntary
worker
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in their school
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and
this
subject should be compulsory for all youngsters. Certainly, I completely agree with
this
statement and I will elaborate on my opinion.
To begin
with, wherever charity tasks assist
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adolescents to develop their good qualities in their
life
.
For example
, younger people who are willing to do helping others in their
life
, always attempt to care about their surroundings and try to improve their noble qualities like optimism, working spirit,
caring
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and caring
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for others.
As a result
, it has impacted in a positive manner and
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to progress their personality
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their young age.
In addition
, youth age learners attain to get
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attention to do these sociable tasks and they flock to assist needy people in their society.
For instance
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younger community tried to
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their junior's sports practices and neighbourhoods in their troublesome situations.
Consequently
, other non-voluntary workers are impacted by these noble qualities and whenever they
also
would
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do
such
sociable and productive tasks for needy humans. In conclusion, from my perspective, I believe charity-related subjects should be want to implement as
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essential learning sector in
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curriculum. If we are able to
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things, we have
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enormous amounts of benefits
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our
life
. Unless we think about our
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, we will be
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by human beings. Since
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our school
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we have
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in charities and it paves the way to acquire responsibilities and to fulfil challenges in our lifetime.
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