Some people think it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports is better like tennis and swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some
people
argue playing individual sports
such
as tennis has more advantages. However
, others myself included believing
that attending company Wrong verb form
believe
sports
with a higher proportion of players
such
as football is more beneficial for individuals in long run. This
essay shall examine both sides in the forthcoming paragraphs.
Some people
toprefer
do individual Correct your spelling
prefer
to prefer
sports
like playing tennis as this
sort of sports
game tends to be easier as they do not need many players
and can be played whenever the person wants without searching for many attenders to play with. For instance
, athletes could do swimming by themselves only at any time of the day they like as many hours they want per day. This
means,
because Remove the comma
apply
this
sort of sport does not need so many people
they are more convenient and a person could play at any time and with her own peace without worrying about her performance as any failure will concern her only.
On the flip side, some say group sports
have more advantages as they help build new friendships and improve teamwork skills. Consider Football as an example, it needs eleven players
for each gameplay and if every member of the team does not cooperate with another player the whole team will suffer. Therefore
, players
not only improve their overall health but they upgrade their communication and team-working skills as members
who influence all other members
. Also
, people
have a bigger chance of socialising than individual sports
. As group teams demand the participation of members
and because of a higher number of members
players
in this
sort of sport could build friendships and specialize.
In conclusion, even though, sports
which need fewer athletics have some benefits but I think group sports
have more positive effects as they develop our teamwork skills and help us to socialize better, other than other benefits in our health condition.Submitted by parafik on
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