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Some people say that the only reason for learnign a foreign languate is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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People
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 have been debating over the purpose of learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
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 whereas some
people
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 believe that it was only useful in travelling to or working in a foreign country and others point out that knowing
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another language
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language
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 can be useful in various fields.
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 my opinion, I believe that having the ability
of speaking
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 more than one
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 can have
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hands
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 in different kinds of cases and explain both sides of perspectives in
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To begin
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 with, the advocates of
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 phenomenon highlight that majority of the
people
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 who are learning
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a foreign
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 are travellers or workers who have a tendency to go abroad.
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, travellers
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 need to know the
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 of the country they will visit as they will likely
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have a great chance to learn the cultures and traditions with ease by knowing their
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.
Likewise
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, employees who will work in foreign countries will surely need to communicate with co-workers and write documents related to jobs.
Beside
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 these reasons,
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 who will not learn another
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 will have more free time which can
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 to learn specialized subjects like science and technology.
On the other hand
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, opponents of
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 issue say that the increasing number of students who will study abroad
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also
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 becoming
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 common reason in society. Not only that, bilinguals or
multilinguals
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multilingual
 are more active in
pocessing
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processing
possessing
 a function since they usually have to translate the meaning of sentences from
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their mother
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 to another
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 and vice visa.
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, the world has become
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 village thanks to advanced
technologh
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technology
,
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 can communicate with each other easily
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online and knowing more than one
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 is the key factor in communication. In a nutshell, I pen down saying that travelling and working are not main reasons anymore for learning
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the foreign
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 since the technology has developed and it contributes in so many matters
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 those.
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