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some people say that modern innovations bring a lot more problems than benefits? Do you agree or disagree?

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I agree with the statement Wich states that modern innovations bring a lot more problems than benefits because of the following reasons; The
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 reason is that modern developments have made life so easy that people are getting very lazy.
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 in turn has led to a rise in the number of medical problems like obesity and heart disease. The
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 reason is that some of these modernizations have taken over regular jobs leading to an increase in unemployment and poverty,especially among factory workers.
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, the pollution
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 emitted from the industries that produce these modernizations has had a very big negative impact on the climate.
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