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Some students take one year off between finishing high school and going to university, in order to travel or work. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages.

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The majority of students take
an
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 year
gap
 between school and university enrollment for leisure or work.
Although
this
 makes them in
lazy
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the lazy
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situation
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, I believe
benefits
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the benefits
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 outweigh
drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 because it provides
with
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them with
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 gaining practical experience and financial independence. One benefit is that students receive extensive knowledge of practical exposure while
on
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at
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 work.
This
 is because most of the classrooms are not equipped with
necessary
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 skills to cater
the
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job
 requirement after
studies
.
Additionally
by
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taking a sabbatical leave
provide
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to provide
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 the learners with
self sufficient
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self-sufficient
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 funds available for higher
studies
.
Moreover
, they get the financial freedom for their daily expenses and prepare them in managing the monthly budget effectively.
For example
, in
UK
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the UK
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among
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the adolescents
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adolescents
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group
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 they prefer to work after high school learning which gives them enormous
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funds
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fund raised
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fundraised
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 for their territory education.
However
, the discontinuation of learning
habit
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habits
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 makes
the
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teenagers in a lethargic mode of mind.
Although
this
 state of situation brings more difficult similarities in preparing them for the
worforce
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workforce
 competition.
Furthermore
,
lack
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a lack
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 of knowledge
gap
 in study puts them in mental stress to cope with the assignment and exam pressure on the go.
Also
, the fear of failure in exams
pretend
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 to continue with the
job
 as a source of income for necessary expenses.
For example
, in Japan teenagers
whom
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 took study
gap
 joined
in as
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a
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the
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 labour force in
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the shipping
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 industries tend to receive
on
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job
 training than their counterparts who continue with higher
studies
. To conclude, a number of students prefer to take a
gap
 year between school and graduation.
However
, the benefits of having necessary
job
 skill training experience and better financial accountability in life
outweighs
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 the drawbacks of disruption of
studies
 that creates laziness.
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