Some students take one year off between finishing high school and going to university, in order to travel or work. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages.

The majority of students take
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year
gap
between school and university enrollment for leisure or work.
Although
this
makes them in
lazy
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situation
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, I believe
benefits
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outweigh
drawbacks
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because it provides
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them with
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gaining practical experience and financial independence. One benefit is that students receive extensive knowledge of practical exposure while
on
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work.
This
is because most of the classrooms are not equipped with
necessary
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skills to cater
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job
requirement after
studies
.
Additionally
by
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taking a sabbatical leave
provide
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the learners with
self sufficient
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funds available for higher
studies
.
Moreover
, they get the financial freedom for their daily expenses and prepare them in managing the monthly budget effectively.
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, in
UK
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among
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the adolescents
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adolescents
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group
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they prefer to work after high school learning which gives them enormous
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funds
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for their territory education.
However
, the discontinuation of learning
habit
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makes
the
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teenagers in a lethargic mode of mind.
Although
this
state of situation brings more difficult similarities in preparing them for the
worforce
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workforce
competition.
Furthermore
,
lack
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of knowledge
gap
in study puts them in mental stress to cope with the assignment and exam pressure on the go.
Also
, the fear of failure in exams
pretend
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to continue with the
job
as a source of income for necessary expenses.
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, in Japan teenagers
whom
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took study
gap
joined
in as
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a
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labour force in
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industries tend to receive
on
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job
training than their counterparts who continue with higher
studies
. To conclude, a number of students prefer to take a
gap
year between school and graduation.
However
, the benefits of having necessary
job
skill training experience and better financial accountability in life
outweighs
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the drawbacks of disruption of
studies
that creates laziness.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gap year
  • Academic momentum
  • Practical experience
  • Financial pressures
  • Interim period
  • Soft skills
  • Maturity
  • Independence
  • Career exploration
  • Re-adjustment
  • Social setbacks
  • Informed decision-making
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