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some people say that main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular specious of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Biodiversity
 loss by the ecological breakdown is the most important environmental
problem
 for some people.
On the other hand
, there are
also
 an important amount of people who
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 the emergency and priority of
climate
change
. In
this
 short essay, I would like to explain why
climate
change
 is the biggest
problem
 we have faced and why we should declare a state of emergency in terms of
climate
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the climate
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 crisis.
Ecological
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The ecological
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 way of thinking highlights the importance of diversity for a sustainable environment. The circle of life can constantly be strong and sustainable with
biodiversity
.
Earth
 is so vulnerable without it.
Therefore
, as the extinction of particular species is on the rise faster than nature can heal itself, the loss of
biodiversity
 is one of the most important problems of
21st
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 century.
Moreover
, it is
the
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climate
change
 causes more damage to the environment and prevents nature to heal, and
regenerate
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 itself. That’s why
climate
change
 is a bigger
problem
 than
biodiversity
 at
first
 sight.
Secondly
, because of the immense amount of greenhouse gas
emissions
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 there is quite a big chance for the total end of life on
Earth
 much earlier than
biodiversity
 loss can emerge too. The atmosphere is already warmed more than one degree. An important amount of scientists
says
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 that it is possible for the
earth
 to be approximately 3 degrees hotter than it was in pre-industrial times at the end of
21st
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the 21st
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 century. If we keep in mind that it is unliveable for humans with 4 degrees of global warming, being aware of the priority level of
this
 crisis will be in our favour.
Consequently
, the
climate
 crisis is the biggest
problem
 we are facing today. We need to act as soon as possible to secure life on
Earth
.
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