Success is often measured in term of how much money somebody has earned. Do you think the wealth is a good measure of success? How else could we measure whether somebody is successful or not?

There are a lot of different opinions on the topic of is
money
a measure of
success
. Some
people
think, that if somebody has a big salary or a huge sum of
money
on
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the bank account, he or she is
a
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successful, but some
people
have
completely
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opposite
point
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of view.
To begin
with
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it is worth to be mentioned, that
personally
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I cannot agree with the statement. I believe that it is not a good way to measure
success
with
money
, as
money
could be received by any means,
for
example
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there is a possibility to win the
lotter
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lottery
or to just have
wealth
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parents,
partner
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etc. Usually, these types of
people
spend
money
easily, they can buy expensive clothes, every day
eat
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in restaurants, but it does not mean
a
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success
, it means, that they are just rich.
In contrast
of
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wealth, thoughts, plans and
behavior
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or
his
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relationships are
another criterion
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of how to say whether a man is successful or not.
Successful
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person always builds plans, he thinks strategically,
he
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and he
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will never spend a big amount on a t-shirt from
luxury
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a luxury
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brand, as it is just a waste of
money
. On the one hand, there are a lot of famous persons how
such
especially media personalities who
are
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usually wear very expensive clothes, drive fast cars etc. They earn every cent by themselves,
they
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and they
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are
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a success
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success
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but
how
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as
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I have already said they are media personalities,
they
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ought to live
such
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way
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a way
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to warm up
interest
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of followers and earn even more
money
.
On the other hand
, the founder of Microsoft, always dresses casually, he is almost the richest man on earth, but he doesn't show it.
instead
, he does good things
such
as philanthropy, hospital funding, and more. He
also
thinks about the future of our planet and in my opinion all successful
people
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first
of all
thinks
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not only about themselves.
Success
equals
money
, but
money
does not equal
success
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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