n the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued in
this
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world, photo and
video
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becoming
more
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valuable way of communicating than
written
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. I strongly agree with the statement, because with the advancement of technology, photos
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to remind us
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moments more than written materials.
To begin
with,
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a decent
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is very complicated. It takes so much time to write a single
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and it is very hard to describe something like emotion.
For example
, when we want to describe our trip to Labuan Bajo through
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, it will be very hard to imagine it without
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picture. The
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might be hard to describe
such
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view, but a single picture can make it clear indication.
This
tells us that a picture had a stronger way of connecting people.
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photographs are proven to be memorable and
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can easily describe something like expression. Through photographs, we can easily imagine the situation at that moment.
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, a
video
is used to record
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experience
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that we don’t want to forget like
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ceremony. If we want to recall our memory simply just watch the
video
through our smartphone.
This
is
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that tells us that
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memory can be
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easily now rather than be
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with words. To sum it up, I can conclude that
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and
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are the preferred
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to communicate with each other,
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simplified the way to express emotions and it only took
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of minutes to describe the meaning behind it rather than
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read a whole paragraph.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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