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Health experts claim that walking is the best exercise. However, people are walking less on a daily basis. What has made it happen and how to deal with this?Write at least 250 words.

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It is widely known that walking is healthy and
also
 the best and simplest exercise. But why do
people
 prefer not to walk on a daily routine? There are a lot of reasons for that.
People
 tend to go with the vehicle because it is faster and safe from unpredictable weather.
Furthermore
, there is no
footpath
 on the road. Many
people
 believe that walking gives a lot of benefits
such
 as being healthier and environmentally friendly. But
people
 nowadays like to use vehicles for their daily routine because it is more practical and does not take much time on the way. Many
people
 have their houses far from their office or maybe school because of population density, so they prefer to go by bike, car, or public transportation to get there. It
also
 avoids them from unpredictable weather,
for instance
, they walk to their destination by walk but when they come home, the rain is falling and can prevent them to go home. Another reason is the inadequate
footpath
. A
footpath
 is a main factor for the walker's safety. To illustrate that from my experience, in my country, there is no precise
footpath
. The
footpath
 is just for the main road but on the lane, there is no adequate
footpath
 so
people
 usually use the vehicle road for walks and it is dangerous for walkers. In conclusion, I think the government must give facilities for walkers to be more comfortable and safe. They can
also
 put some chairs on the sidewalk and if it is implemented I do believe
people
 tend to walk rather than use vehicles.
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