Some people say that TV advertisements are helpful for viewers, while others disagree. What is your opinion?

Today,
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industry is booming and advertisements are flooding
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tv and the internet. Many
people
feel annoyed with
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and some
people
are finding it interesting to explore
new
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product
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products
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. In my opinion,
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are mostly
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a hoax
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hoax
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. In
this
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we will see why
this
is the case.
First
of all,
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companies are making
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advertisements
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very strategically. They study
people
’s interests and physiology
,
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And create advertisements like they
it
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connect with our fillings and you will buy it eventually.
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,
coca cola
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company, they are not selling their drinks but
they
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selling emotion in their advertising. And they try to think you for cola when you are thirsty
instead
of water.
Secondly
, They beautify the
product
in it and create some stories and mislead us about the
product
. And when we actually purchase the
product
, it far different
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it was in the ads. like on tv there are many midnight
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shows
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are running and selling
the
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cheap quality
product
by telling false stories and attractive
representation
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representations
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of
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the product
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product
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products
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.
Furthermore
, the internet is everywhere. and digital media are targeting the
people
by their age and interest.
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, we all have noticed that if you search for any
product
and
then
you go anywhere on the internet you will bombard with the
product
's ads.
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, many
are
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also
find it helpful, like my wife
see
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some
product
that helps her in the kitchen and make many tasks quickly and easily. In Conclusion,
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advertisements
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are very focused and give
a false ideas
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about the
product
. They are tracking and targeting the prole to display the ads and force you to buy
it
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them
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. But, only sometimes they might be
a
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use full for some
people
to find a new
product
.
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