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people today generally have better lives than people in the past. To what extent do you agree?

#people #lives
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Due to
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 advancements in
technology
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technology,
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this
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 century is full of comforts for human beings despite some minor issues. Currently, the world's dwellers have many more facilities than the public of the old era. I fully agree with
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 statement and in
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 essay, I will highlight the reasons
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 illustrations followed by a lucid conclusion.
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 with, The very first factor encountered in
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 regard is that science is more progressed than in the past. New inventions in applied sciences devote many latest kinds of equipment which are used for research purposes and these appliances are used to identify the flaws earlier.
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, any difficulty in man's life can easily be handled.
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, many hospitals are equipped with the newest technologies, so human diseases can easily be cured.
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, Another reason is that living beings have more ways of transport.
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 better evolutions in aerodynamics which provide the cheapest and
fast
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 means of travelling and the journey are taking less time than the earlier tenure.
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, shortage of foods, medicines etc is a very rare case in today's world. To cite an example, the existence of air cargo makes deliveries of various items easy throughout the planet.
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, I completely concur with
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 idea that people have better lives than in the past because robotics is more advanced than in the old period and recently, a great number of transportation sources
are
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 available. Given
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 situation, It seems that research institutions need to strive hard to provide many conveniences and make community lives lavish.
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task response
Expand on the reasons and examples to provide more depth to the arguments.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, but the essay could be improved by providing a clearer and more comprehensive structure.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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