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Some people think that the best way to run a business is within the family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of a family run business?

#people #business
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 own
business
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 is a good way for long-term purposes. Some
people
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 think that running a
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 with
the
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family members
are
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 the best
options
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.
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, I believe that these options will give the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. There are
some
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myriad reasons behind
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 an argument. When we are working together with
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family member, we encounter social problems. There will be different
perspective
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perspectives
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 among family members and will have a
confilct
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conflict
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 it takes to solve a problem. The family member who
want
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 to involve in
business
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 if
they
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don't understand the situation of
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the job
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 while a bond will lose with each
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inequality and
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 how to divide each of the shares. On contrary, recruiting
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staff is the advantage of working with the family. To elaborate
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, nowadays, most
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people
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 are starting individually
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 of working for an organization.
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In deed
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, they are fed up
of
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 working for other
people
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 in that case family
business
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 is the great
benefits
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benefit
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 and
interview
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 a lot of
people
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 for meeting their requirements. In conclusion,
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 critique elucidated the virtues and hiccups of running a
business
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 within
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. Despite the fact that I am profoundly convinced that the cons of
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 phenomenon overshadow the cons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • loyalty
  • trust
  • communication
  • generational knowledge
  • long-term outlook
  • family traditions
  • stability
  • cost-effective
  • flexible payment arrangements
  • conflict
  • tensions
  • roles
  • diversity
  • external perspectives
  • innovation
  • adaptation
  • succession planning
  • instability
  • leadership
  • ownership
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