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Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is a controversial discussion about how much freedom should be granted to
children
 on everyday matters. Some
people
 argue that giving them too many rights may have a permanent impact on their habits in the
future
, while some
people
 consider that making
decisions
 on their own is beneficial to their
future
 life. In
this
 essay, I will explain both standpoints. On the one hand, it is hard for kids to evaluate whether their decision is good or bad themselves, due to their lack of experience in
such
 matters.
In other words
, they tend to only consider their own feeling without the adequate assistance of parents and teachers.
On the other hand
, nowadays, more and more youngsters are the only child in their whole family which may cause them selfish and self-centred.
For instance
, in Taiwan,
people
 tend to raise one kid; give him/her unlimited privilege and love which may cause their offspring spoiled. In the
future
,
children
 eventually need to face the truth about making paramount
decisions
,
such
 as the major in college, career and marriage. In
this
 case, it can significantly help
children
 to develop a sense of responsibility by giving them rights on daily matters. In the process of
decisions
, they are gradually creating the ability to have opinions which is an essential ability in their
future
 life.
For example
, in the meeting,
people
 who get used to making
decisions
 may do better in creating an idea. From my point of view, parents should neither leave them alone to recklessly do anything nor take
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 of their
children
. It should be a good balance between these two cases.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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