In some areas of the US, a 'curfew' is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?
There is no denying that
curfew
is the best decision made by the authorities of Use synonyms
the
particular state at any crucial or Correct article usage
a
any
pandemic period. It aids in working on the obstacles going around the world we liveCorrect quantifier usage
apply
.
Looking forward Change preposition
in.
for
the safety of Change the preposition
to
people
Change noun form
people's
curfew
is the only way to cease it. Use synonyms
Curfew
means staying home for our safety should be acceptable.
In my Use synonyms
opinion
allowing teenagers to go Add a comma
,opinion
out
Correct your spelling
outdoor
door
without Add an article
the door
accompany
adults during Change the verb form
accompanying
curfew
is not advisable as some area of Use synonyms
US
where Correct article usage
the US
curfew
is imposed due to Use synonyms
illegal
activity going around and have disturbed the lives of citizens dwelling there, Add an article
the illegal
so
it was necessary to take Correct word choice
apply
this
step to control the current situation. So as a citizen we ought to follow the rules and stay at home. Linking Words
Younger
generation Add an article
The younger
are
deprived of the rules and restriction and may trap in Change the verb form
is
evil
action. As they can’t justify what is wrong and right or may practice any Add an article
the evil
misbehavior
. They should not move outside alone especially at night because it might be troublesome for them to cope Change the spelling
misbehaviour
up
any critical situation. Taking advantage of Change preposition
with
current
era drugs mafia may attract them. Correct article usage
the current
This
Linking Words
influence
them to involve in it and Change the verb form
influences
as a result
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drugs
business and addiction Change the noun form
drug
increases
. Apart from Fix the agreement mistake
increase
this
, rioters are not used to Linking Words
stay
at home, they Change the verb form
staying
wander
in the town can harm them.
Wrong verb form
wandering
On the other hand
, to make them mature and responsible, parents should allow them Linking Words
go
out alone Add the particle
to go
with
providing relevant information about Change preposition
by
Use synonyms
curfew’s
rules and Change noun form
curfew
regulation
. Fix the agreement mistake
regulations
This
will help them to predict the problem Linking Words
if
they may have to face. Correct word choice
apply
Sometime
as a parent we are insecure and Replace the word
Sometimes
concern
about our Wrong verb form
concerned
child
and won’t keep them lonely, Fix the agreement mistake
children
as a
Linking Words
result
they wouldn’t be active enough to communicate in Add the comma(s)
,result
such
circumstances Linking Words
arise
suddenly and fully Correct pronoun usage
that arise
depended
on us. So, some liberty should be allotted to them. Replace the word
dependent
Linking Words
Initially
they can’t distinguish between real and unreal, but gradually it may be easy for them.
To conclude, I would like to agree with teenagers should be permitted to go out alone during Add a comma
,Initially
curfew
. As a Use synonyms
parent
it’s our duty to make them aware of the world around Add a comma
,parent
Correct pronoun usage
them as
as
they can handle and cope Correct word choice
so
up
with problems Change preposition
apply
if
arise Correct word choice
that
in
Change preposition
at
the
particular time in future. And Correct article usage
a
least
point is to ensure them that your support will be always there whenever they need it.Correct your spelling
last
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