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Some people think books are losing importance as a source of information and entertainment. To what exetnt do you agree?

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It is believed by some
people
 that
books
 are becoming less significant in providing us with
knowledges
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knowledge
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 and amusements. I only agree with
this
 statement to a certain extent as the popularity of book readings do get affected ever since the invention of the
Internet
.
Firstly
,
people
's attention spans are constantly decreasing ever since the rise of the
Internet
.
For example
, a short video clip that only
last
 a few seconds could trigger enough stimulus to entertain
people
.
This
 results in a reduction in our concentration spans which
render
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 us impatient in spending a long time
in
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 tasks
such
 as
books
 reading.
Secondly
, searching for
information
 from textbooks is time-consuming.
Instead
 of scavenging for a particular book in a library,
people
 could just spend a few seconds entering keywords on the
Internet
 search engine to access
information
. It is less efficient to search for
information
 via
books
,
thus
 the popularity of using textbooks as a source of
information
 diminishes.
However
, paper-based
books
 might be less popular but many
people
 still enjoy reading electronic
books
 on the
Internet
. Electronic
books
 are more portable and convenient as many
books
 can be stored in a single electronic device.
Moreover
,
books
 often have more reliable
information
 than the
Internet
 as
a
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strict examination and regulation will be imposed on textbooks to ensure the contents are correct and evidence-based. In conclusion, I agree partially that more
people
 prefer to source
information
 and entertainment from the
Internet
 rather than
books
 due to efficiency.
Nevertheless
, there are still a considerable number of
people
 that enjoy and rely on
books
 for
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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.
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