The average standard of peoples health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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matter is
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public
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domain as
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are out and about looking into the solution of
detoreriating
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depreciating
community
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because of the needy
health
.The average standard of community well-being is likely to be beneath in the time ahead than it is currently.I completely agree with the statement with
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being that modern farming is utilizing
alot
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a lot
a lost
and inappropriate chemical during farming and the traditional food is
nolonger
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no longer
appreciated.
Firstly
,farming is
such
an essential activity in the
society
as it
pray
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a big role in feeding
public
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and
also
providing
resourses
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resources
for the government.
However
,
farmer
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are using
alot
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a lot
of fertilizers and chemicals to increase production which is
deterimental
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detrimental
to
health
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the health
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of the
society
such
that
crop
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crops
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that
are
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intended to grow for six months now just take three months.
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chemicals end up accumulating in our bodies leading to
disease
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such
as cancer.
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,technology is
also
a huge
contributer
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contributor
to
people
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health
because they are
nolonger
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no longer
visiting hospitals wherever they get sick but just google
in
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the internet about their condition and go ahead to buy medication over the counter which is later leading to complications.A recent study by Nairobi University indicates that most people at the age of 60 have an underlying condition.
Therefore
,taking care of our
health
is fundamental
such
that the risk of
complication
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and having
underlying
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condition
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conditions
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as they age is of concern.
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,
better
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health
care system and technology is
such
a
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rescuer
rescue
as diseases will be detected early followed by advanced treatment.
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the
policy makers
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policymakers
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insisting
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on free
heallth
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health
care services
such
that nobody will
not
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be able to receive treatment due to
lack
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of finances.
A recent
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research by Kenyatta university indicates that in every 500km there is a
goverment
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government
health
facility.
Therefore
,despite an indication that the
socitey
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society
health
is slowly headed
to
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wrong
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direction,the system
are
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in place to counter the issue if the community is ready to take it up. To sum up,the danger of
unhealthy
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society
in future is on the rise due to
the
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modernization
such
that unless people are willing to work with the systems put in place by
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lawmakers
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law makers
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lawmakers
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to counter that indication of
unhealthy
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an unhealthy
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society
it will be worse in the time ahead.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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