The average standard of peoples health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Health
Use synonyms
matter is
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
public
Add an article
the public
show examples
domain as
policy makers
Correct your spelling
policymakers
show examples
are out and about looking into the solution of
detoreriating
Correct your spelling
depreciating
community
Correct article usage
the community
show examples
because of the needy
health
Use synonyms
.The average standard of community well-being is likely to be beneath in the time ahead than it is currently.I completely agree with the statement with
reason
Add an article
the reason
show examples
being that modern farming is utilizing
alot
Correct your spelling
a lot
a lost
and inappropriate chemical during farming and the traditional food is
nolonger
Correct your spelling
no longer
appreciated.
Firstly
Linking Words
,farming is
such
Linking Words
an essential activity in the
society
Use synonyms
as it
pray
Change the verb form
prays
show examples
a big role in feeding
public
Correct article usage
the public
show examples
and
also
Linking Words
providing
resourses
Correct your spelling
resources
for the government.
However
Linking Words
,
farmer
Fix the agreement mistake
farmers
show examples
are using
alot
Correct your spelling
a lot
of fertilizers and chemicals to increase production which is
deterimental
Correct your spelling
detrimental
to
Use synonyms
health
Add an article
the health
show examples
of the
society
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
that
crop
Fix the agreement mistake
crops
show examples
that
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
intended to grow for six months now just take three months.
Linking Words
This
Change the determiner
These
show examples
chemicals end up accumulating in our bodies leading to
disease
Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
show examples
such
Linking Words
as cancer.
Inaddition
Correct your spelling
In addition
,technology is
also
Linking Words
a huge
contributer
Correct your spelling
contributor
to
people
Change noun form
people's
show examples
health
Use synonyms
because they are
nolonger
Correct your spelling
no longer
visiting hospitals wherever they get sick but just google
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the internet about their condition and go ahead to buy medication over the counter which is later leading to complications.A recent study by Nairobi University indicates that most people at the age of 60 have an underlying condition.
Therefore
Linking Words
,taking care of our
health
Use synonyms
is fundamental
such
Linking Words
that the risk of
complication
Fix the agreement mistake
complications
show examples
and having
underlying
Add an article
the underlying
show examples
condition
Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
show examples
as they age is of concern.
Secondly
Linking Words
,
better
Correct article usage
a better
show examples
health
Use synonyms
care system and technology is
such
Linking Words
a
rescuir
Correct your spelling
rescuer
rescue
as diseases will be detected early followed by advanced treatment.
Linking Words
Moreover
Add a comma
,Moreover
show examples
the
policy makers
Correct your spelling
policymakers
show examples
insisting
Wrong verb form
insist
show examples
on free
heallth
Correct your spelling
health
care services
such
Linking Words
that nobody will
not
Rewrite the sentence
apply
show examples
be able to receive treatment due to
lack
Correct article usage
a lack
show examples
of finances.
A recent
Remove the article
Recent
show examples
research by Kenyatta university indicates that in every 500km there is a
goverment
Correct your spelling
government
health
Use synonyms
facility.
Therefore
Linking Words
,despite an indication that the
socitey
Correct your spelling
society
health
Use synonyms
is slowly headed
to
Change preposition
in
show examples
wrong
Change the article
the wrong
show examples
direction,the system
are
Change the verb form
is
show examples
in place to counter the issue if the community is ready to take it up. To sum up,the danger of
unhealthy
Correct article usage
an unhealthy
show examples
society
Use synonyms
in future is on the rise due to
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
modernization
such
Linking Words
that unless people are willing to work with the systems put in place by
Correct your spelling
lawmakers
show examples
law makers
Correct your spelling
lawmakers
show examples
to counter that indication of
unhealthy
Correct article usage
an unhealthy
show examples
society
Use synonyms
it will be worse in the time ahead.
Submitted by Sabina Hamisi on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: