The average standard of peoples health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Health
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matter is
on
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public
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the public

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domain as
policy makers
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policymakers

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are out and about looking into the solution of
detoreriating
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depreciating

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community
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the community

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because of the needy
health
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.The average standard of community well-being is likely to be beneath in the time ahead than it is currently.I completely agree with the statement with
reason
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the reason

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being that modern farming is utilizing
alot
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a lot
a lost

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and inappropriate chemical during farming and the traditional food is
nolonger
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no longer

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appreciated.
Firstly
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,farming is
such
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an essential activity in the
society
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as it
pray
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prays

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a big role in feeding
public
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the public

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and
also
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providing
resourses
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resources

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for the government.
However
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,
farmer
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farmers

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are using
alot
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a lot

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of fertilizers and chemicals to increase production which is
deterimental
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detrimental

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to
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health
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the health

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of the
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such
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that
crop
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crops

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that
are
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is

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intended to grow for six months now just take three months.
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This
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These

It appears that the singular demonstrative This is modifying the plural noun chemicals. Consider using a plural demonstrative or a singular noun instead.

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chemicals end up accumulating in our bodies leading to
disease
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diseases

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such
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as cancer.
Inaddition
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In addition

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,technology is
also
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a huge
contributer
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contributor

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to
people
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people's

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health
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because they are
nolonger
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no longer

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visiting hospitals wherever they get sick but just google
in
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apply

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the internet about their condition and go ahead to buy medication over the counter which is later leading to complications.A recent study by Nairobi University indicates that most people at the age of 60 have an underlying condition.
Therefore
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,taking care of our
health
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is fundamental
such
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that the risk of
complication
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complications

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and having
underlying
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the underlying

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condition
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conditions

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as they age is of concern.
Secondly
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,
better
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a better

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health
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care system and technology is
such
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a
rescuir
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rescuer
rescue

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as diseases will be detected early followed by advanced treatment.
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Moreover
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the
policy makers
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policymakers

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insisting
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insist

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on free
heallth
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health

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care services
such
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that nobody will
not
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apply

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be able to receive treatment due to
lack
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a lack

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of finances.
A recent
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research by Kenyatta university indicates that in every 500km there is a
goverment
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government

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health
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facility.
Therefore
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,despite an indication that the
socitey
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society

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health
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is slowly headed
to
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wrong
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direction,the system
are
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is

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in place to counter the issue if the community is ready to take it up. To sum up,the danger of
unhealthy
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an unhealthy

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society
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in future is on the rise due to
the
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modernization
such
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that unless people are willing to work with the systems put in place by
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lawmakers

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law makers
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to counter that indication of
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an unhealthy

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society
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it will be worse in the time ahead.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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