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All children should learn to speak a foreign language as soon as they start school. How far do you agree with this proposal? How important is it for a child to learn a foreign language?

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modern communities, having the knowledge of at least a foreign
language
besides
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academy
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. Almost all parents insist on
this
 ability for their kids. But really the importance would be discussed here. Proponents of learning a
further
language
 believe that increasing trend in nations communications
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 makes people
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 the youngers to know another popular
speech
 to keep their relationship.
Furthermore
, most sciences and up to date
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 have been published by academic talents from developed countries so having the ability of reading or
speaking
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languages like English, French or Mandarin would be a demand.
Students
 should learn these languages as soon as they start
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school to understand everything well and go far. The ideal age for learning a foreign
language
 is concurrent with
start
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 of school age. Finding an appropriate job may need going to a foreign country. Some others choose
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on
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 different schools or universities in foreign countries
then
, they will need to know how to speak or write and
also
 find what they say.
Finally
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 access to social media makes people
to
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be familiar with different languages as
need
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. There are opponents
with
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 the policy of learning extra
speech
 in schools. They assume that making
students
to
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learn another
language
 is a type of
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 and it should be abstained by the Governments.
Students
 have
this
 right to learn another
speech
 or not so, they should not be obliged. A student should have the potential of getting success without having the knowledge of an extra
language
. Briefly, it could be seen that most children now have
tendency
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 to learn another
language
 apart from their
motherhood
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language
then
this
 capability should be arranged for them appropriately. Learning different kinds of
speech
 and slang is an art and
also
 could expand the learning potential of
students
.
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