Write about the following topic. It has been argued that giving gifts to friends and family should not be encouraged, because money is often wasted on things that people do not like or want. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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to fellows and loved ones
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not recommended because money
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just wasted on items that they dislike or needed. I completely disagree
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this
statement with the reasons that
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expresses the significance of friendship and symbolizes important events of their loved ones
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being
treassured
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treasured
reassured
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Gift
giving to a friend
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deeper
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meaning of friendship.
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, there are circumstances that some of the items are not to their liking or needed
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the joy it brings
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undescribable
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Meaning
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,
people
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that people
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who received gifts are happy that someone
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them on their special day.
For instance
, presenting a
gift
during a friend's birthday
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occasion
make
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them special in the event.
Hence
, it is not the value of the item
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being measured but the action to be taken.
In addition
, offering a present to a family member is reminding them that they have
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place in your heart.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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