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In marriages today, some argue that it is the responsibility of both spouses to earn a living for the family. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#marriages #argue #responsibility #spouses
The present marriage trend is transitioning from the old tradition, which is that women normally stay home
to
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household
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the household
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 and men go out
for
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 work. From my personal view, the price of goods increases
therefore
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, to have a high quality of standard of living, both
of
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partners should have the responsibility of gains salary. In past centuries, it was common that after the wedding event usually women care
of
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 the house and men work for the salary for families,
however
 as the world changes the price rise higher. It is almost impossible to men to support more than 2 family
member
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members
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 in the house, so
to
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as to
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 have
better
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a better
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 quality of
living
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the living
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 environment.
This
 world
is
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no longer have stereotype
on
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about
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women’
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women’s
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 ability
also
 the government now encourages them by making policies related to women
such
 as
retain
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 married women’s job position,
therefore
 the field is significantly better
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compare
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 to
last
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 few years.
In addition
, after the marriage people normally have their own children and absolutely the money on the kid will
be spend
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 burden of money.
For example
, South Korea is one of
country
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the country
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 which has
enormous
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an enormous
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 size of educational
economic
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 to make their child
to
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attend
to
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the top university here.
This
 can be extremely important to
middle
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 class because families expend all the money
to
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on
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 their
kid
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kids
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 but after they became an elder, obviously they might not
any
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 property to continue their
tranquility
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 life. Unfortunately, uncountable households are in
this
 situation which is
also
huge
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a huge
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 problem
to
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 the country. In conclusion, the world is
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impossible
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impassible
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 to imagine how competitive it is,
therefore
 to have
stability
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the stability
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 of standard of living both
of
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spouses should think
this
 is not
the
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 optional choice anymore to survive.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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