A friend of yours is thinking of going to a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice.

Dear Peter, How are you doing? Good to hear from you. I am sure that you will
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go on a camping holiday. In Canada, during the
summer
, there are lots of
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to visit and I am sure that you will enjoy it,
moreover
, the climate, the
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wonderful
turists
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tourists
and
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nature is
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welcome
experince
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experience
ever. Make sure to book as soon as possible. Unfortunately, during the
summer
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all the places
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overcrowded and you might find some disadvantages.
Fistly
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, there are too
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trash all over the campsite and the bathroom shouldn´t be as clean as
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season,
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, the animals might not appear due to the lack of
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made by people and car
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engineers
. My husband and I have just booked the Banf´s campsite for
this
summer
.
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this
place
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the administration
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it seriously the number of people which makes the nature experience even better.
Thus
, I am wondering if you want to join us
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that trip. We rent a nice cottage that
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all of us. Let me know if you are in. It will be
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grateful
to go camping with you at
this
summer
. Best wishes, Gabriela
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventure
  • serenity
  • outdoors
  • refreshing
  • hustle and bustle
  • inherent
  • foster
  • distractions
  • cost-effective
  • unpredictable
  • wildlife
  • adequate preparation
  • physical demands
  • researching
  • campsite
  • lasting memories
  • mutual interests
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