A friend of yours is thinking of going to a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice.

#friend #holiday #first #time #summer #advice

Dear Peter, How are you doing? Good to hear from you. I am sure that you will

enjoying

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go on a camping holiday. In Canada, during the

summer

, there are lots of

campsite

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to visit and I am sure that you will enjoy it,

moreover

, the climate, the

wonderfull

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wonderful

turists

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tourists

and

the

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apply

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nature is

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welcome

experince

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experience

ever. Make sure to book as soon as possible. Unfortunately, during the

summer

break

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all the places

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overcrowded and you might find some disadvantages.

Fistly

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Firstly

First

, there are too

many

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trash all over the campsite and the bathroom shouldn´t be as clean as

another

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in another

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season,

Secondly

, the animals might not appear due to the lack of

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made by people and car

engeneers

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engineers

. My husband and I have just booked the Banf´s campsite for

this

summer

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this

place

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the administration

take

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it seriously the number of people which makes the nature experience even better.

Thus

, I am wondering if you want to join us

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that trip. We rent a nice cottage that

fit

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all of us. Let me know if you are in. It will be

greatfull

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grateful

to go camping with you at

this

summer

. Best wishes, Gabriela

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

197 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

adventure
serenity
outdoors
refreshing
hustle and bustle
inherent
foster
distractions
cost-effective
unpredictable
wildlife
adequate preparation
physical demands
researching
campsite
lasting memories
mutual interests

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