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Although more and more people read the news on the internet, newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree with that statement?

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Some
people
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 believe that reading the
news
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 online is increasing a lot today. The traditional newspaper will still be a significant source of information for readers. In my opinion, reading
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 on the
internet
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 definitely gives more benefits.
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 of all, nowadays,
people
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 have easy access to the
internet
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, which means
people
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 can receive faster and updated
news
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.
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, during Sunami in Thailand in 2010, the tourists died more than 100. It was difficult to identify the body which they were at the time. The Thai government has used the
internet
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 to update the
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 and situation to
people
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 worldwide, which can spread the
news
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 to tourist families.
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, many families of tourists contact the government to get the body back. Another benefit of the
internet
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 is that it can upload videos and voice records on various online websites.
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, soccer fans these days can re-watch their
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 matches anytime and anywhere when they want with only connected to the
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 on their devices, which a newspaper cannot do.
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, one of the limitations of the newspaper is that it limits messages which means the readers might not get all the information and possibly allow readers to misunderstand. In conclusion, I'm afraid I have to disagree that newspapers will continue to be the most significant source of information anymore because more and more
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 will be increasingly using the
internet
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.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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