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You eat at your college cafeteria at lunch time every day. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter: explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved

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Dear Sir, I am writing to you to express problems faced by me as well as other students during lunchtime in the cafeteria.
Although
, It has all the basic necessities
such
 as a water cooler yet I am facing various discomforts. The food served by them is very delicious.
In addition
 to it, the people serving the meals are very polite and humble. I love the lunch they fed me.
Also
, they prepared the item which is in special demand by faculty or students. Despite these likings, I am too much disappointed with the seating arrangement in the canteen. All the chairs are not properly managed which causes a messy environment in the hall.
Furthermore
, there are fewer tables due to which many people have to wait for their turn. I would like to suggest that please arrange more tables so that no one has to wait for their turn to eat meals.
Moreover
, ask the staff to place all the chairs in proper arrangement.
This
 change will be beneficial to serve us in a good way. I hope you will look into the matter. Yours Sincerely, Kuljeet Kaur.
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