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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? you should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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time changes, so
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 society. When we compare the current trend of university choices with the ones in the past, we are able to see more options
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 college choices and the shift
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 studying abroad.
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disadvantages of being an international student. There
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plethora
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 of advantages
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 earning a degree abroad.
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,
person
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the person
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 who takes classes in
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 nation is more self-sufficient and reliable. They are in charge of everything in their life, from learning, cleaning, cooking,
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self-soothe. Case in point, an international student will have to cook for themselves especially when they are missing cuisine from
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 country or a mother’s recipe.
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, overseas study promotes intercultural understanding, since it is a hub for people all over the world who are in pursuit of similar dreams.
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, through immersion in the multicultural city
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 York, an Indonesian undergraduate finds herself loving Baklava and learning Turkish from her roommate,
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 learning more about Turkey.
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, being in a new environment encourages class-taker to exercise their language capability.
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, a graduate from Haiti taking his
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 degree in Germany needs a B2 language certificate to understand better in class and to communicate fluently with his
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. The disadvantages of living overseas do come naturally.
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 with, living on your own in a new country can feel overwhelmingly lonely. The wave of needs that comes and goes, from missing parents back home or longing to see friends in other places
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 a given. The problem lies when one does not know how to control
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 emotion.
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, there is
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additional stress regarding documentation and administrative process that may vary from
home-country
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.
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, living in a bigger country can be expensive. To conclude, studying in
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 land comes with its upside and downside.
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, the writer believes the voyage to
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 one’s aspiration and potential never comes easy and the case differs individually. Whatever choice the student pick; abroad or at home, it should be made
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 their plan and their goal in life.
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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