An ageing population is affecting parts of the world

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avoid death and ageing.According to the above , a sentence we could know about a human being must experience ageing progress and pass away.Nowadays,the world population have been increasing too faster,

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the experts are worried about the effects on society's medical resource and economic development.On the other ,hand we will discuss

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aftermath and its causes. “The major cause of medical resource was serious insufficient to support elder.The reaction of hospitals and human resources burden

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continuous given to elder people or

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be hospitalized patients not good in enough medical system,because of population grow fast have been bringing struction variety of age group in the country.

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affect financial must to high expenses and medical resource lacking. “The

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reason is labour market shortage didn'

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have enough young people participate.The aftermath of

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the appropriate employee.The labour market needs plenty of workers who form each country's participation career market,due to an ageing population affect many

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want to figure out a solution,

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developed region' governments used appropriate policies like immigration to attract foreigners to participate make

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normally developed and advanced. “The

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reason is retirement elder take load issue. The aftermath of the responsibility worker requirement problems it's not just only financial expenses but

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the need for care workers to support older.

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developed retirement communities to take concern

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the older,which could make a convenient to

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elders and offer comfort environment.

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as offering nice facilities and 24-hour-a-day,bathing,feeding, laundry etc. The communities have paid a high expense it,but a part of people

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enough money burden it,I think it will big problem with the current society they just found the solution.