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More and more people today are moving away from where their friends and family live. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Changes have become a vital part of society. Earlier, People used to live close to near and dear ones but in recent times people are migrating from their birthplace or where their
parents
 live. In the upcoming, paragraphs one is going to discuss the merits as well as demerits and evolve a conclusion from them. Advantage There are a plethora of benefits.
To begin
 with, The youth have more opportunities to pursue their career that leads to a bright future; the standard of living improves. Adults can provide better medical or educational facilities to their kids or even they can support their
parents
 financially.
Secondly
, Sometimes, families are toxic. They would like to interfere in your professional life and would like to control and limit Breaking out the barrier by moving out not only helps mentally but it brings a lot of career opportunities. A metro city does provide you with a good hike in salary with job responsibilities you deserve. Disadvantage
On the contrary
, No doubt, technology is growing day by day. It does help everyone to stay connected but that doesn’t justify physical presence.
For instance
,
Parents
 are living in one part of the country and the child is in the other part. Is it even possible for a child to visit their
parents
 weekend, for a fever, or to help them with buying groceries?
Secondly
, it brings more trouble for introverts. Making new friends or adjusting to new cities isn’t that easy. They feel homesick
thus
 leading to depression or anxiety. To conclude,
Although
, there are a few disadvantages
in contrast
 to advantages. Be optimistic, and look at the brighter side. Numerous advantages which are being brought by migration can’t be overlooked.
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