the increasing of private car lead to high level of pollution. Do you agree with this statement and what can be done to solve this problem?

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level of
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. Do you agree with
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statement and what can be done to solve
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problem
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? Nowadays there is a huge
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of
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number of private
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, which lead to
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. Some people believe, that
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that it is not a big issue.
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absolutely agree with the statement, that
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growing number of personal vehicles no depts causing
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are on the road the more it harms our planet. In my opinion, there are a lot of ways to solve the high-level
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of privet
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in one family and use more public transport
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as buses, underground or to use one cat together. Nowadays some families which consist of 3-4 members have two or more
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, and I suppose that it is no right when you’re a living in a city.
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, if three persons are driving one car, they are causing less damage to the earth,
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, humanity can use
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, it will reduce air
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causing
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with the environment, but
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a lack of parking places, traffic jams etc. In
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I would like to say, that
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